Editorial Services

Welcome to my editing services page!


~Email: mary@kitnkabookle.com

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Unpacking and Detoxing

Unpacking: Great fiction is like a present, wrapped beautifully and concealing a fantastic surprise.

Detoxing: Great fiction is like a healthy diet, balanced but tasty and with the occasional dessert.

Let’s make your manuscript its best self.

I hold an MFA in Writing Popular Fiction from Seton Hill University. I know where character, plot, and world intersect. I find gems in the confusion of early drafts, pluck them free, and polish them to the shine of something great. At the line level, I make every sentence glimmer while preserving your voice and style (oh, and I know my way around a comma, too). Moreover, an undergraduate degree in psychology means I understand your characters, what drives them, frightens them, brings them joy. This combined with my own experience slogging through the quagmire of the publishing world means I understand you. I’ve lived the anxiety, excitement, and impatience of getting a manuscript from concept to completion. I’ll walk with you every step of the way to make it happen.

What I Work With

I work with genre fiction (including stories with genre/literary crossover), and I specialize in the following:

  • Fantasy (epic/high and “doorstoppers,” fairy-tale retellings, contemporary, YA, MG)
  • Science Fiction (dystopias, superheroes, science fantasy, YA, MG)
  • Mysteries (cozy, amateur sleuth, YA, MG)

I also work with other subgenres not listed for the genres above, as well as romance, thriller/suspense, YA paranormal and contemporary, and anything else MG you can think of.

Things I may not be the best fit for:
  • Hard (science-based) sci-fi
  • Excessive violence/gore
  • Horror (especially psychological)
  • Rhyming children’s books

What I Offer

I have an array of services designed to help at whatever part of the process you’re in, but my specialties lie with developmental editing, line editing, manuscript evaluations, and beta reads. Read on for details about my services and a comprehensive breakdown of my rates.

Unsure what you need/want? Email me at mary@kitnkabookle.com to chat. I’m also always pleased to provide a free sample edit ( approx. 1500 words, one per customer) to help determine what a manuscript needs, as well as if I’m the right person for the job.

Beta Reading

Have a polished draft and looking for “reader” feedback? With a beta read, I go through as if I’ve just picked this book up off the shelf. You’ll get a general report of my reading experience—likes, dislikes, if I was ever bored, etc. If you have a specific concern (such as if character X is likeable), I will read with that in mind, say yes or no, and give some brief feedback.

Worried my MFA beat out my individuality and has made me pompous or shortsighted? Don’t be. I’m as much a reader as I am a scholar and have consciously kept brain cells out of academia to maintain my love for the adventure of a new book. Feel free to browse reviews on Kit ‘N Kabookle to get a feel for my positive but constructive tone. After all, a beta is just an in-depth review before you pitch the book.

Please Note: Beta reading is not editing. It is a different type of service for which I use an entirely different skill set. For more information on my process and what my beta reading service does/does not include, read my Beta Reading Q&A.


Project Word Count Turnaround Time Price
20,000 or less regular (1-2 weeks) $20
20,000 or less expedited (1 week) $30
20,001-40,000 regular (1.5-3 weeks) $30
20,001-40,000 expedited (1-2 weeks $40
40,000 and up regular (3 weeks) $40 + $1/1000 words above 40,000
40,000 and up expedited (2 weeks) $50 plus $1/1000 words above 40,000
*If your manuscript is much above 100,000 words, it may take longer.


Developmental Edit

These are the big guns, so to speak. A developmental edit focuses on big-picture items (world, characters, pacing, plot, etc.). It provides an in-depth description of issues and suggestions for fixes. You’ll get a detailed report of problem areas at both the overall and chapter levels. If there are issues with the writing itself, I will do some in-line editing to highlight recurring issues, such as passive voice or overused sentence structures, and show how to fix them.

Line Edit

Line edits focus on story flow at the sentence level. Are you using the right words to pack your story with the biggest punch possible? Are sentences the right length and style for the story’s tone? Here, I’ll focus on things like word choice, word order, preserving your style, etc. As it pertains to flow, I will also highlight incorrect grammar or usage of punctuation so you can see the fix.


And now for the little people. A copyedit focuses on correcting grammar, punctuation, and usage. If you’re writing in past tense but a sentence slipped out in present, I’ll point it out. These are the little details that make a big difference.

Please note: If you’re goal is to self-publish, I highly recommend getting a final proofread after the manuscript has been formatted. It’s always good to get that final pair of eyes before a book goes to print. I don’t offer proofreading services, but I know some awesome people who do and would be happy to pass along contact info when it’s time.


Type of Editing *Turnaround Time Base Rate (price/word)
Copyedit 3-5 weeks $0.01/word
Line edit 4-6 weeks $0.0175/word
Developmental edit 5-7 weeks $0.0225/word

*Turnaround time based on manuscript length of 80,000 words. Time will vary with manuscript length.

Short Fiction

Short fiction is anything below 5000 words. I charge flat rates depending on word count for developmental, line, or a copyedit.
500 words and under$20
501-1000 words$35
2501-5000 words$150


Manuscript Evaluation

Not sure what type of editing you want or need a comprehensive idea of what isn’t working in your story/writing? Consider a manuscript evaluation. I like to call this development editing light. For a manuscript evaluation, I’ll present big-picture issues (plot, character, pacing), as well as a chapter-by-chapter breakdown of where and what kind of work needs to be done. If the writing itself needs attention, I’ll do a bit of in-line restructuring to show corrections for common issues (passive voice, overused constructions, etc.).

Mini Manuscript Evaluation

Contrary to the name, this is not for mini manuscripts (only time I’ll make that joke, promise). This is a less detailed manuscript evaluation and tailored for writers who want a general idea of what’s not quite working. With this, you’ll get the big-picture of the full manuscript evaluation but not the chapter-by-chapter notes.

Concentrated Read-Through

While more of a read than an evaluation, this is more in-depth than a beta, which is why it’s down here with the evaluations. With this, I read through the manuscript with an eye for one or two specific concerns you’ve communicated. Need to know if a certain character’s personality is consistent? Does that one aspect of your magic system insist on changing itself when you aren’t looking? Need someone to highlight where the manuscript is dialogue or description heavy? These are the kinds of things a concentrated read-through looks for.


Service *Turnaround Time Base Rate
**Manuscript Evaluation 2-4 weeks $2.50/page
**Mini Evaluation 1.5-3 weeks $1.50/page
Concentrated read 1-3 weeks $3/1000 words

*Turnaround time based on manuscript length of 80,000 words. Time will vary with manuscript length.

**Prices per page are based on standard manuscript format (Times New Roman font, 12 pt., 1-inch margins), which I calculate as 250 words/page

Other things I can help with

Item Price
Outline evaluation $15/page ($25 minimum)
Query letter editing $50
*Query letter writing$250
Synopsis editing $20/page ($30 minimum)
*Synopsis writing$300
Bio editing $30
Blurb editing $50
*Blurb writing$200
**Submissions Packet Critique$150

*These services require me to read the manuscript. I do not provide feedback on the manuscript itself with these services.

**This service is designed to help get querying materials into shape. I will offer feedback and perform a light copyedit on the query letter, synopsis (up to 3 pages), and first 3 chapters of the manuscript.

Ready to get started?

Email me at mary@kitnkabookle.com with the following info if you have it. I look forward to working with you!

  • manuscript genre
  • manuscript length
  • brief description of the project (what’s it about?)
  • type of editing/service desired (if known)
  • Anything else I should know/questions you have


Mary evaluated my epic fantasy, Season of Sacrifice, which wasn’t a light task at over 200k words. She clearly set the expectations up front, was extremely professional, and most importantly, delivered valuable feedback that will produce a story worth reading. I like to think that she helped me level up as a writer and hope to have her edit more of my manuscripts as I continue to produce them.
-Jonathan J Michael
I met Mary in the Fall of 2019. She offered to do a read-through and evaluate my MS. Her feedback was instrumental for developing my story, and I hired her to do a full edit after her initial feedback. I now have a well polished MS, and I love where she took me and my story. She was quick with her turnaround time. I will absolutely hire her again for my next books.
-Sandy Dal Santo
I've had the pleasure of working with Mary for both a critique of my manuscript as well as my query letter. She has been very helpful in identifying what works, what doesn't, as well as offering recommendations for changes. She somehow managed to identify key items that other readers hadn't picked up on, and each time she was right! Her turnaround time is quick, and she is incredibly professional in her communication. I would highly recommend working with Mary!
-Jeff Wiemiller
Mary was an absolute delight! She read my manuscript and pointed out problems that I haven't even noticed, her turnaround time was fast and efficient, and she's a stickler for details! Would definitely be hiring her again.
-Tamara Saadeh
I always look forward to Mary's feedback on my writing. She taught me practically everything I know about structure and how to plot a story. Her edits are thorough and incisive, and always delivered with great warmth and kindness. I hope she'll be helping me find the magnificence in my messy manuscripts for years to come.
-Andie Biagini – contributor to Meet Cute and Born to Love Wild
Mary was a beta reader for my Middle-Grade Fantasy book, Terrence and the Magical Sword of Courage. Not only did she give a timely turnaround but the feedback she gave me was top notch! She pointed out things that other readers hadn’t commented on and that I hadn’t even thought about. Her critiques were spot on and improved my story, helping shape it into a story that every reader has enjoyed. I give Mary 5/5 and highly recommend her for your projects.
-C.R. Langille, multi-genre author

I was so lucky to find a beta-reader like Mary! She was one of the first people to read my manuscript from start to finish and she was the perfect person for the job. I read her comments and, straightaway, I understood what my story was missing. She raised issues that were bothering me on a subconscious level — issues that I couldn’t identify on my own. Without her assistance, I’m sure I would still be reading and tweaking the same sentences over and over. Thank you, Mary, for helping me create a story I’m proud to share.
-Rosie Shepherd